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Grant1969

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Location
Scottish borders
Type of diabetes
Type 3c
Treatment type
Insulin
Dislikes
Diabetes and my personal inabilities.
This happy waddler has finally met his match
To get the full story I'd need to start from scratch
But I've neither the inclination or the time
So I'm trying to convey the message in the form of a rhyme
Nothing new has happened, no terrible upset
Everything has remained the same, it was as is...and yet
The song in my heart has been muted, dumbed down
A painted on circus face has become my mask, permanent frown
My bird of paradise has been shot down, feathers and fluff
My wee world has turned left for the worst and I'm feeling enough is enough
Fears and anguish fill my head, making me mad
With the futility of my anger decisions turn bad
Down to the river to watch the water flow
Wishing I could immerse my unfortunate and simply let go
Cast adrift my emptiness and watch it float away
Retain the inner giggle to bolster me through the day
Returning me to the me that I've seemed to got to know
Upside down and inside out always early but needing to go.
 
I've been and gone but now I'm back
Thrills and spills, heart attack
Spiritual adventure a driving power
Toasting mothers ruin, happy hour
Placid sedentary with the welcome of home
Whisky in my cocoa, miscoloured garden gnome
Cob webbed revolution against the demon of time
On going and going on, my capital crime
Rating the pace and trapping the speed
Comfort in my numbness being my only need
Whiling the away with my hands full of time
Remembering the imagination
Imagining the rhyme.
 
wolfie11969 said:
You really do have a talent. Have you thought of submitting to a local magazine/ newspaper?
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Thanks for that, I have previously been published in a book but I gave all that a miss cos it was vanity publishing and I couldn't afford it, hehe, I'm happy now if someone else likes my err attempts cos sometimes I find it soooo therapeutic me being a man of so few words in reality, kinda shy and awkward in person but a poetical keyboard warrior when left alone, thanks again though.
 
@Grant1969 would you check out some of my writing please? Here's a little ditty...

The daily grind, I usually find
Sometimes manageable, occasionally fine
Like the best known routine
Smooth, rehearsed, slick
As once again I
Pull, click, press, prick

5 times a day, at least
Points penetrate my fingers
Silvery tips enter my thighs
That same routine rushes through my mind
As once again I
Twist, glide, press, sigh

“Want this doughnut, this treat?”
No, no thank you, I’m sweet
“Oh go on, you can’t be watching your figure”
No, just another injection I can’t face
Explaining again, trying not to snigger
That if I wish to stay alive, once again I
Pull, click, press, prick
Twist, glide, press, sigh
 
BOOOM!!!, I've never been a very good critic because sometimes I can't find the right words and personally I find some poems to be really heartfelt and saying the wrong thing can, again I find, have drastic consequences ranging from embarrassment to, believe it or not, suicidal tendencies so I tend to just relate the way it's made me feel and your piece literally spun me off on a tangent adding another five or six verses, probably not as good, ahem, but wow, that's why I love poetry, secretly, sometimes, just sometimes, it puts you in another place and time and you moved me, sorry I'm getting way to deep and rambling, in short, I liked it, well constructed and measured with an easy flow, the second reading taken slower puts pictures in your mind. Whatever else, keep writing.
 

I agree with you regarding being careful with feedback - poetry is so personal!!
I'd love to hear your tangent verses

We should all keep writing forever, and ever, and ever!

Thanks for reading and for the review!!
 
Grant1969 said:
This happy waddler has finally met his match
To get the full story I'd need to start from scratch
But I've neither the inclination or the time
So I'm trying to convey the message in the form of a rhyme...
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Hi @grant, just to be clear...I have put like because your poetry is amazing, not that I like that you feel this way...does that make any sense? x
 
Grumpy ole thing said:
Hi @grant, just to be clear...I have put like because your poetry is amazing, not that I like that you feel this way...does that make any sense? x
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Thanks, sincerely, for that and this may sound bad but, even if you were glad I felt that way, it's a response to the silly words I've strung together and that's a target reached at least, that sounds wrong cos I don't think you'd wish me ill but emotional responses are complicated things.
 
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